Artifice

Quite enjoyed the new update. While I kind of suck at writing reviews, I will try to put one together.

I do have one question, kind of spoiler ish so I will try to hide it...

This isn't a big problem but when at the portal with Emily and Sora, do we lose affection with Emily no matter what we did or did I somehow make a wrong choice? 

Is there a Chinese language option?

Really enjoyed this game, and just to confirm the 0.1 public will be released next week?

Hi Duve! I’m a native Arabic speaker and I’d love to help add Arabic to Artifice to make it accessible to the Arab gaming community. Since I love the concept, I’m happy to help. Can you share the text files with me so I can take a look?

Is there any chance of you posting this on itch directly instead of download sites (I am using the itch app on steam deck which is incompatible with 3rd party downloads) This game looks amazing and I would love to check it out!

Wow, this prologue was nothing short of incredible. There seemed to be tidbits of worry from the creator regarding pacing, but frankly, it was fantastic and I was constantly engaged without a single break in immersion or a single jolt from jarring transitions or whiplashing emotions/topics.

The MC felt truly unique and interesting, yet perfectly imperfect with obvious flaws that stem from what is so far a really compelling backstory. It shows clear goals for him and the stories development while also providing just enough to make the MC and the story mysterious and keep everything surrounding the narrative captivating.

The other characters all felt individualistic with their own quirks and personalities, the models, set pieces, posing, camera angles and interactions were effective, well done and natural. Then, the story so far was *chef's kiss* it was wonderfully bread crumbed and built up with a nice little cliffhanger that left me ready for more.

I've never engaged with theater so I'm sure this story will likely have many nuances that go over my head or happenings that I won't quite understand, such as the narrator filling in some empty scenes such as the changing room section or the woman running away in the rain section, which is probably my only gripe so far as it feels like more of an interruption than adding additional thematic flavor, but other than that I honestly can't find much to complain about. It would be nice if there was actual music to drive the emotion to the next level, but I understand this AVN is in its infancy.

Overall, the prologue was exceptional. I'm waiting in anticipation for future updates. Wonderful job!

P.S. 

If it's alright to ask, to what degree did NoGlory, KloppStyle, W.M. and D-San contribute in the creation of Artifice?

Greetings !
I love what you have made with this game so far and can't wait to see where this weird shaped story may go.
My only pet peeve with it would be what I would refer as, in this case, scenic indication.
Basically little additional information you put between *those*.
My opinion on their use is that they take me out of the writing.
Why? Because I'm a fan of medium which show stuff rather than tell me about it.
By that I mean that those scenic information are on stage, played rather than told about.
I believe that your writing and imagery skills are far more than enough to depict an action, emotion, or whatever needs to be said instead of falling back to some pesky, bland looking, and feeling indication.
Which I do believe are already superfluous in plenty of the scenes you have written and shown as is.

Oh!
During the first meeting with sporty girl and the actress who dressed as a nun in her first appearance, there is a sentence where I am quite sure you have forgotten to add a word.
I can fetch up more precise information on that if you please.

Thank you again for sharing with us such a promising premise!
I wish you a wonderful day.

I recently found this game through another games recommended games, just like you list Astreon, Dawnfall and Dogma.

I think the story premise of the game is very interesting!
That said, I think your presentation is pretty bad!

1)  fast forwarding text without me pressing a button or having auto turned on:

This is immersion destroying and prevents me from being able to read the very text you are presenting unless I roll back over and over and over! :-E

It is extremely annoying every time I run into this!

You can't control the mechanical speed of the game!

Each person reads at a different rate and therefor full control of text progression needs to be solely in the hands of the player!

2)  Monologuing:

You start off the game with a long ass monologue and then the old guy says ok no more monologues....  then as soon as the MC is done their intro, you have a girl who IMMEDIATLY starts monologuing again!

The first rule of presentation in a video game is show, don't tell!

You would be vastly better served introducing all the stuff she said while doing a transitional slideshow showing where they are going when they travel and having each person she or he mentions, then showing up on screen when they are mentioned.

At least this way, the player gets a sense of what they are talking about and what the people look like, unlike right now where the intro is just a bunch of nonsensical rambling, which makes no sense until much later when we actually meet the other characters!

3)  Your pacing is often bad:

When the characters go from a scene where everyone is sitting or standing around and just talking, it's vastly better to have the next scene have movement or actions that are significant.

But for instance, you have the pool scene where you introduce the two girls being scheming bitches and then immediatly after goto the resteraunt scene where everyone is still just sitting around.

I know you changed the camera angles to try to add some sense of motion, but it'd be even better if scenes of non movement were followed by movement or change, as well as scenes of action being followed by scenes of rest... that sorta thing.

If you were to fix these above things, I believe your game would be vastly more enjoyable and I'd likely be able to keep my suspension of disbelief going!

I probably won't be back, since I've got a lot of other games to read, but if you make the above changes, I hope your game does gain popularity.... since it seems a story worth experiencing.

o/

How the hell do I know with one I need to download for Android if they all in the same file?

So i played prologue and ended it and the game got me so hard. Can't wait till next update, dev just tell me i wont wait too much for that. :D

Plss help me how to unzip this afternoon i download btw I'm using Android

I don't speak indonesian but nice that it is included.

Also do you plan to release on GOG or steam(although they continue to be censoring)

Hey Dev, your game looks super awesome. I've high hopes form this game.... It'll be one of my favourites. But I wanna ask you something.... Do you plan to add name changing for the mc?... I'm talking about real name changing, there's one name changing option that is cover name.... This is the only thing that's bugging me, so I thought, why not ask you.....

How do I unpack it? There are three files there?

What did you post to get your page blocked? And is this game story completed?